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During the Halloween week of this year, CNN reported that Nickelodeon was brainwashing children in the United States by showing other children who are standing up for their beliefs. On January 28, 2007, Nick News with Linda Ellerbee presented “Rebels with a Cause” about five stories of children who were not afraid to take actions on their belief. All of the five stories are based on controversial social issues that we are facing as a society today. The first segment was about how children should take action on child labor used to produce clothing for United States consumers. The second segment was about a boy speaking out against the use of torture on prisoner with suspected terrorist connections. The third segment was about children hoping to bring attention to the negative impact of high stakes testing on instructional methods and to eventually change the state law. The fourth segment was about animal rights and how animals are abused in the circus. The last segment was about a girl who does not support the War in Iraq and even protested at the State Capitol in her home state. All of these Nick News stories are happening right now, and they are very important to our future.


A CNN program made a big deal about Nick News program that how a cartoon network like Nickelodeon was showing serious controversial issues in television. Children are turning to their network to watch cartoons not to become informed what is happening in the United States. On Halloween night, CNN asked child psychologists how the Nick News program would affect children. Child psychologists were against on the actions of the Nick News program, they said that Linda Ellerbee, the host of Nick News was an anti-war, anti-military and liberal person who is pushes leftist propaganda on kids. Then they asked the viewers to post their comments on the CNN blog. Most of the viewers were Christian conservative parents who do not celebrate Halloween. The CNN network needed to entertain their viewers; they knew who would be their audience on Halloween night. They found controversial stories to entertain their audience and they found the Nick News story that was additionally half year old. In addition, the commercials showed were kind of conservative bias. They showed Christian advertisements focusing to sell Bible in CD’s and DVD’s or Christians Charity commercials.


Beside what CNN was showing, online blog website was full of angrily comments against the Nick News with Linda Ellerbee “Rebels with a Cause” episode. Nevertheless, the second and last segments of episode were the most contentious segments that people will for irritated and crazy. Most of the people were angry on the boy of the second segments who was calling for the impeachment of the President. In addition, the fourth segment, the teenage girl blames America for what is happening in Iraq. The girl placed some images and videos that look she got them from Al-Jazeera network in her segments. In an online article, John Stephenson reported that one of the members of the Army Wife Toddler Mom website stated “This Nickelodeon “news program” is not a news program. It is a leftist primer on how to be a “left-wing radical rebel.” I strongly disagree with this statement; the Nick News with Linda Ellerbee had been more informative than the local news and even CNN. Children today are smart enough to form their own opinions on the issues they face. The member of the Army Wife Toddler Mom website posted that the address and contract information of Nickelodeon and asking the bloggers to call or write a letter to Nickelodeon people to fire Linda Ellerbee for brainwashing our children.

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You keep deleting your old questions -- hope you're keeping the answers so you can keep track of the corrections.





The first paragraph is MUCH, MUCH better than your intro and the rest of this piece. There are many, many grammatical errors. The second %26amp; third paragraphs mirror your previous "intro" efforts. Frankly, the first paragraph sounds like you did not write it. If this is the case, you need to cite your source.





Go ahead and delete THIS question too if the answers displease you -- it's obvious that's what you've been doing. But that won't change anything.
Reply:From where you say "I strongly disagree" you should break it off and start a new paragraph. Up until this point you've been providing facts without your opinion.





Then move the final sentence up to the previous paragraph (before the "I strongly disagree") since you are continuing to relay facts. Consider a new ending line summarizing your opinion at the end of the new "opinion" paragraph.





Otherwise, looks good.